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= Congratulations
Türk-König
[18.Aug.13 16:03]
"The craving for fresh fruit of a child" might be the correct logical grammatical order, but to me it seems slightly ironic in this poem. I´d not change it but put it into another line. The last stanza sounds almost like an haiku.
= thanks
Gabriel Nicolae Mihãilã
[14.Oct.13 21:00]
for the visit and sign. I wished to be kind of ironic there and maybe a little bit funny...but in a naive way, seems like i almost achieved that.

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= Congratulations	Türk-König [18.Aug.13 16:03]
"The craving for fresh fruit of a child" might be the correct logical grammatical order, but to me it seems slightly ironic in this poem. I´d not change it but put it into another line. The last stanza sounds almost like an haiku.

= thanks	Gabriel Nicolae Mihãilã [14.Oct.13 21:00]
for the visit and sign. I wished to be kind of ironic there and maybe a little bit funny...but in a naive way, seems like i almost achieved that.