= Intriguing really, but... | John Willy Kopperud [06.Sep.08 14:42] |
....in the title; pray animals, that won't do. The correct spelling is PREY. PRAYING is a religious activity. Secondly: The line; so cripple very heroes does not make sense. Would "the very heroes so crippled" make a better line? Thirdly the next line; "The shirt is already rended." I perceive the word IS here as unnecessary. Please quit it. Cheers from Willy | |
= danke! | Marius Surleac [06.Sep.08 14:51] |
Hi Willy! Thanks for the tip with the "prey" (haven't seen it). Secondly, "the" is more fine and as I said some time ago - the romanian version inflicts something else, and the "is" stays better - I think! Cheers from Marius! | |